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one nickel. that's all I'm asking, all I want
for my thoughts. one nickel. one nickel
to change a life. get it, do you? I'm begging
for change. change
is the stuff that jangles
in loose pockets, the forgotten wealth
that batters against phones
and wallets and keys; it's the stuff of sugar-spun clouds,
weaving cotton-candy bridges
between our hopes and dreams and, yes, our
fears. one nickel. one nickel for ephemeral promises
and for five percent of a burger, yes, friend, can you
spare a nickel for such things? I'm just asking
for change, away from grimy sidewalks and
from wars, away from urban decay
and the recession, yeah, and I just
need it, and I need it now, just like
that obnoxious commercial. we all need. we need
nickel-backed stallions to talk away
all of this gunk and misery and replace it
with some magicked utopia, because this sure as hell
ain't it, I'll tell you that, and the longer it takes
for you to fork over that nickel, the closer we're all coming
to starvation.
but can you imagine what I'm saying? I want the real deal,
politician's promises come true, the world spinning
like the busy top it was built to be, but friend,
all I'm really asking for is that nickel. I know
that metal change is all you'll be dispensing, and the sugary stuff
is something you don't find balancing on a subway grate
with shoe-scum coating its skin.

Forget the nickel, friend,
won't you spare a dime?
Quickwrite. I'd like to hear what you guys think. :) It's a WIP still.

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ocd-arsonist Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
oh, very well-written. a gorgeous message, well done.
one of the more meaningful poems i've read in a while.
Kasmiria Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
Wow, this is amazing, especially for a "quickie." It really does describe today's society. Love your work by the way!
cairnthecrow Featured By Owner May 31, 2009
Thanks! :)
fennecfox339 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
Bunneh, I adore this!!!!
It is so very true and seems like the most random thing to preach about (Sorry, i just picture a hobo (or some college/early20's kid) saying this to someone....)
And, of course, it is unbelievably funny
I was actually Laughing out loud (egad!)
I really like it, Bunneh
cairnthecrow Featured By Owner May 8, 2009
Ah, sorry for the delay!
But...thank you! I'm glad I made you laugh. :P
TEhStALkEr Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2009   Writer
I...this makes me want to print it and bring it in to English class to show it off :P
cairnthecrow Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2009
What, as if it were your own? No sticky fingers! :P
But thanks. :D I'm actually pretty proud of this one.
TEhStALkEr Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2009   Writer
HAHAHA. No. Not as my own, silly. :P
You should be! I considered it worthy to present to the Great English Teacher. (GET? GET. I WANT, SO I GET. Yay, yay.)
cairnthecrow Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2009
I stared perplexed at this comment for two days until I figured out that GET was a just-made acronym for Great English Teacher.

Oh, me.
TEhStALkEr Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2009   Writer
Oh, you. :iconfailureplz:
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